Tomorrow, be prepared to have a brief discussion over these questions:
What makes a procedural text easy to follow?
What makes a procedural text difficult to follow?
What role does ideas play in writing a procedural text?
What role does organization play in writing a procedural text?
What kind of voice works best in procedural texts?
What kinds of words work best in procedural texts?
Should you strive to have long fluent sentences or short precise sentences in procedural texts?
How important or helpful are diagrams in procedural texts?
What made you persistent in trying to complete each “how-to”?
What is expository writing and why is it so important? Click on the links below to find some answers.
Purdue OWL: Essay Writing: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/685/02/
Stanford University: http://www.stanford.edu/~arnetha/expowrite/info.html
Great Source: http://www.greatsource.com/iwrite/students/s_expos.html
“The Little Mermaid” is a Danish tale written in 1836. Read the original “The Little Mermaid” (1836) by Hans Christian Anderson here: http://scandinavian.wisc.edu/mellor/taleballad/pdf_files/LittleMermaid.pdf
Danish: Den lille havfrue, literally, the little seawoman
With each sentence in your narrative, you will need to conduct a careful examination of the sentence construction and its details. You will revise each sentence so that it is the best possible sentence that you could/should have written.
1. Star the sentence that you think tells about the change in you as a result of the incident and write the word CHANGE to the left of the margin.
2. Star the sentence that you think identifies the incident and write the word INCIDENT to the left of the margin.
3. HOOKS: If you used one of the strategies for beginning your narrative (AQQS, pg. 29, SB), bracket the hook sentence and identify the strategy that you used and write the name of strategy to the left of the margin. Revise or create a hook sentence. (Homework)
Steps 4-9: Revise your sentences so that it uses one of these elements:
4. VERBS: Double-underline the verbs in all of your sentences. Circle the main verbs. Did you use a verb like “ran” in your sentence and maybe added the adverb “quickly” so that the reader would know how fast you ran? Perhaps you should have used the verb “sprinted” or “bolted.” Don’t those verbs give you a more VIVID picture of that moment in your narrative? Did you use the verb “said” every time you used dialogue in your narrative, but you also used an exclamation point? The verb should be changed to reflect the excitement of the exclamation point. Homework: Choose at least 5 sentences for this step. (You may do more if you choose.) If the sentence could be made more alive or descriptive by using a VIVID verb, make that change. Write the VIVID verb above the one that is being changed.
5. ADJECTIVES: Highlight in yellow the adjectives in your sentences. Did you use the tired, old adjectives such as “sad,” “happy,” or “bored”? Did you add the adverb “very” so that the reader knew to what extent you were sad, happy, or bored? Perhaps you should have said that you were depressed, ebullient, or disinterested. Don’t those adjectives paint a more VIVID picture of your emotions/feelings at that moment in your narrative? Homework: Choose at least 5 sentences for this step. (You may do more if you choose.) If the sentence could be made more alive or descriptive by using a VIVID adjective, make that change. Write the VIVID adjective above the one that is being changed.
Tutorial Options: Wednesday AM or PM
* Bring your novel
* Complete an ERROR ANALYSIS
Retest: Thursday AM or PM
*Must have your novel review completed
*Must have attended tutorial on Wednesday
If you need a helpful reminder about narrative writing, view this clip (again) and refer to the notes on pp. 12-13 in your SB (Activity 1.6).
Synthesize your understanding of “change”. After your table has completed its discussion of the character and reached a conclusion, provide your team’s answer to the items 1-3 listed below.
1. Character’s name
2. First names of the people at your table
3. Character’s transformation.
Write a paragraph (or more) about an incident that brought about change and caused you to “grow” in your life. If you need help getting started, think about the characters from the novel VFS.